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Topic: I need your help!-
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Entaris
Dark Priest
Member # 224
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posted 08-08-2002 09:25 PM
     
Ok, heres the deal, do to my outstanding poetry that i have submitted to this site, they have choosen me to be in a special "best poets of 2002" book, and i need to submit a poem that i havnt presented to them yet, so, im going to post some, tell me which one you guy's think i should send 'em!
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1)Piece of mind
Within a heart, of darkened mood
there lies the spark, of love and good.
A hope, a dream, to bring the change.
To take you far, from were you stood.
To make you whole, and true of mind.
A ringing bell, of ancient rhyme,
the love of hate, the hate of mind.
The bringing now, to current time.
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2)AnguishMy heart is filled with anguish
My mind is filled with fears
And when I think these thoughts,
They always bring forth tears
Had I known this truth
That I now must see
Would I have still let you
Walk away from me?
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3)Balance
I look within,
and search without.
To find my heart.
And lose my doubt.
To open truth,
And find the source.
The center found.
The balance brought.
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4)Chaos calmed
light within, dark of night,
summoned fear, ancient might,
bring forth calm, to chaos storm,
feeling lost, is now reborn.
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4) Minds eye
The truth is told,
In my mind,
My heart is true
The pain is gone,
To feel these things,
You must release,
The problems we think,
The truths we deny,
All is known,
To my minds eye.
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Please give me your vote, and remember, uncle sam wants you! *points* man, im so jazzed, this is the third book ill be in! *does a jig*
if anyone of you get bored, send your work to "www.poetry.com" its kinda a simply site, but its fun to enter stuff and see what happens  -------------------- "Insert Snappy quote here"
Posts: 796 | From: Victorville | Registered: May 2002 | Logged: 67.227.22.201
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Mara1Jade
Expanded Universe Goddess and Corran Obsessor
Member # 68
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posted 08-08-2002 10:36 PM
2 and 3 are my favorites, but in terms of overall flow AND content, I gotta go with 2.-------------------- Small minds think in small terms!
~~CMH, creator and writer of Shayla Petrolu, Erik Kartan, Shawn Petrolu, Terrin Danner, Jasyn Lancaster, Matt Stanza, Aaron Barnes, And Taylor Garrison~~
Posts: 972 | From: Jacksonville, FL, USA | Registered: Sep 2000 | Logged: 66.20.156.85
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Entaris
Dark Priest
Member # 224
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posted 08-11-2002 10:03 PM
Heh, ya, they told me i was being selected cause my poems make people think, and thanks everyone! i have dicided to go with piece of mind, and yes, i remembered you liked that graysith, i counted your vote before you made it. *chuckle* Thanks again, if i win money because of this, well, im not gonna share it, but ill give ya'll a big hug... i should be able to afford a few plan tickets  . -------------------- "Insert Snappy quote here"
Posts: 796 | From: Victorville | Registered: May 2002 | Logged: 67.225.96.192
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